Following our debate on the value of audience feedback, we decided as a class that it would be useful to get some final feedback just before submitting our work.
We asked the Year 12 groups who first saw our coursework when it was a rough cut months ago to look again, and also to comment on the print products.
We thought they would be a good choice because:
- they gave good feedback before
- they had seen the early cut so knew where we had come from
- they were unlikely to suggest major changes as they understand the deadline we are working to
- we had given feedback to them previously so they would be inclined to help.
As a result of this feedback (which we chose to have in written form after a viewing) we made the following changes:
Trailer
Addition of ident - our trailer did not 'feel' like one because it didn't have all the proper formal elements:
2. Change of music for mid section as the audience felt ours was not in the right tone - this section gives a feel, we are hoping for a more military battle-style atmosphere:
3. We re-filmed this section as one of the actors was slightly smiling - we also made the dialogue a little clearer:
4. Additional dialogue - ('killed in action' - for those who do not know what K.I.A means, and 'why didn't Scott tell me' - suggests secrets between brothers and a problem that Scott has that is ambiguous - therefore we do not know why the mother says 'no, no' - has Scott been killed? court martialled? kicked out army? Makes our trailer more open-ended):
5. Additional footage to make the 'going to the papers' section clearer. Also addition of Mum's voice to add to emotional impact and make it clear Sam feels he is doing the right thing, even if for wrong reasons:
POSTER
Not many changes suggested and very small:
Slight colour change to review and addition of drop shadow
Smoke adjusted to put attention on 'critically acclaimed'
Shadowing reduced on smaller images at bottom
Smoke reduced overall and wispy section top left removed - too 'magical' in feel
MAGAZINE COVER
Again, small changes suggested:
Red font shade slightly altered to be less pinky red and more dark (blood-like)
Smoke adjusted to allow 'with' to be read clearly
Background blending slightly altered.
We asked the Year 12 groups who first saw our coursework when it was a rough cut months ago to look again, and also to comment on the print products.
We thought they would be a good choice because:
- they gave good feedback before
- they had seen the early cut so knew where we had come from
- they were unlikely to suggest major changes as they understand the deadline we are working to
- we had given feedback to them previously so they would be inclined to help.
As a result of this feedback (which we chose to have in written form after a viewing) we made the following changes:
Trailer
Addition of ident - our trailer did not 'feel' like one because it didn't have all the proper formal elements:
2. Change of music for mid section as the audience felt ours was not in the right tone - this section gives a feel, we are hoping for a more military battle-style atmosphere:
3. We re-filmed this section as one of the actors was slightly smiling - we also made the dialogue a little clearer:
4. Additional dialogue - ('killed in action' - for those who do not know what K.I.A means, and 'why didn't Scott tell me' - suggests secrets between brothers and a problem that Scott has that is ambiguous - therefore we do not know why the mother says 'no, no' - has Scott been killed? court martialled? kicked out army? Makes our trailer more open-ended):
5. Additional footage to make the 'going to the papers' section clearer. Also addition of Mum's voice to add to emotional impact and make it clear Sam feels he is doing the right thing, even if for wrong reasons:
POSTER
Not many changes suggested and very small:
Slight colour change to review and addition of drop shadow
Smoke adjusted to put attention on 'critically acclaimed'
Shadowing reduced on smaller images at bottom
Smoke reduced overall and wispy section top left removed - too 'magical' in feel
MAGAZINE COVER
Again, small changes suggested:
Red font shade slightly altered to be less pinky red and more dark (blood-like)
Smoke adjusted to allow 'with' to be read clearly
Background blending slightly altered.
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